【问18】老师, 我在范文里看到这样一个句子：Although participation in extracurricular activities often results in students having less time to do homework, the benefits of these activities outweigh their drawbacks. 而且我自己也喜欢写这样的句子。请问这是很标准的书面语言吗？另一句：Although Vincent Van Gogh influenced countless artists after his death, during his lifetime, he failed to achieve fame for the art he created or profited from sales of his work. 这是句子有错误，不指错在哪里？ 

答：Although participation in extracurricular activities often results in students having less time to do homework, the benefits of these activities outweigh their drawbacks. 这个句子从语法角度看没有什么错误，但从修辞角度说不够简练，可改写为：Students who participate in extracurricular activities often have less time for homework, but the benefits of these activities outweigh their drawbacks. 美国人一般更喜欢简练的英语。但按照雅思写作标准，你引用的句子也算得上很好的句子。

      Although Vincent Van Gogh influenced countless artists after his death, during his lifetime, he failed to achieve fame for the art he created or profited from sales of his work. 句中错误在于or profited造成逻辑不清楚。这里从逻辑上profited 应该和achieve 对称才是。因此应改为 or to profit，即Although Vincent Van Gogh influenced countless artists after his death, during his lifetime, he failed to achieve fame for the art he created or to profit from sales of his work. 

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