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雅思写作:一篇考官范文帮你搞定静态图写作


  作者:谢爽

  很多同学在写静态图的时候经常会感到没思路,或者是词穷,发现在动态图中可以用的那些高分句式统统没有了用武之地。下面新东方在线谢爽老师带大家一起来通过一篇考官范文来解决大家在小作文中遇到的种种困惑。

  真题为C4 Test3Task1: The chart gives information about post-school qualifications in terms of the different levels of further education reached by men and women in Australia in 1999.

雅思写作:一篇考官范文帮你搞定静态图写作

  知识点1:对于静态图在改写第一段的时候采取“give the information about”或者是“compare the differences between/among”是比较方便的,因为所谓静态图就是不涉及趋势的变化,所以用这两种比较概述性的表达比较容易完成首段的改写。之后只需要从题目中或者图表的标题中选出相应的名词或者名词性词组加在后面即可。

  知识点2:在开头段的改写中,有的时候中心名词的修饰限定部分仅仅通过形容词是说不清楚的,此时同学们一定要把握机会秀出自己的语法,而且此时多数情况会使用“非谓语动词”“或者定语从句”

  We can see immediately that there were substantial differences in the proportion of men and women at different levels. The biggest gender difference is at the lowest post-school level, where 90% of those who held a skilled vocational diploma were men, compared with only 10% of women. By contrast, more women held undergraduate diplomas (70%) and marginally more women reached degree level (55%).

  知识点3:中间段的首句一般情况下是用来写概述性总括句的,也就是我们所谓的overview,overview意味着是该段落所涉及的描述对象的明显的且概括性的特征,考官通过“we can see immediately that”和“substantial”简单利落的做到了overview应行使的表达作用。

  知识点4:通过“biggest gender difference”我们可以充分体会到西方人的表达习惯--先从最高值说起

  知识点5:where引出了一个新颖有容易理解的定语从句,替代at this level,句中又嵌套一个who 引导的定语从句,尽管是双重定语从句但是表达上层次清晰,意思明了。这是一句极易模仿的高分表达,大家学起来呦。

  知识点5:By contrast,引出与之前相反的情况描述,关联词同样清晰利落,之后句子的描述简洁易懂。做到了9分,评分准则中所说的“uses a wide range of structures with full flexibility and accuracy”,复合句简单句交错使用

  知识点6:marginally more than其实就等于咱们所说的a little more than,一个marginally瞬间变高端。

  知识点7:同样都是拿学历,同样都是简单句,分别通过“held..... diplomas....”“reach....level”,以及下一段的”men with....diplomas”解决了表达重复的问题。

  At the higher levels of education, men with postgraduate diplomas clearly outnumbered their female counterparts (70% and 30%, respectively), and also constituted 60% of Master’s graduates.

  知识点8:outnumber比起surpass和exceed更适合静态图用来描述“超过”。

  知识点9:counterpart一个非常实用而且高端的代词counterpart在这里就等于“people with postgraduate diplomas”。

  知识点10:“respectively,分别地“,constitute表示占据,都是静态图的高频实用词汇,大家不要忘记使用呦。

  Thus we can see that more men than women hold qualifications at the lower and higher levels of education, while more women reach undergraduate diploma level than men. The gender difference is smallest at the level of Bachelor’s degree, however.

  知识点11:看到了考官的结尾段,大家对于结尾段不用再有什么不甘心了吧,不用太奢华的内容升华,信息交代全面即可。或者再加一句最明显的特征就一切刚刚好了。

  搞定了这些,静态图一定不再是大家冲击雅思写作高分的绊脚石,加油!