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7.12烤鸭沉重的阴影之写作篇

放松了整整一个月,终于又要踏上征程,为7而奋斗!!!
首先还是把作文总结完,拨开阴霾,重新振作!!!

下面是我对考试那天的文章的回忆。请大家多多指点!Thanks so much!!!

Some people support the development in agriculture such as factory farming and scientific creations of new types of fruits and vegetables. Others oppose. Discuss both of the views and give your opinions.


When it comes to the issue of food, we can discern that it is really at a difficult crossroad.
Whether the government should subsidize the developments of the new technology in research of new types of food or not?

Different people who live in different background hold different opinions.
Some people who lend their supports to the government assisting the development of new type food.
1.它可让人们对食物有更多的选择,享受更多食物的新口。
2.它可减少人们在食物上的花费,让更多的穷人也可吃得起,使他们的生活变得更健康。
3.它可加快世界经济的发展,促进世界的贸易交往。

On the other hand, opponents of this view argue that
1. The creation of new types of food很可能含有一些有毒的物质,which 带给人们致命的疾病
.而且,即使The creation of new types of food现在被认为是对人没害,但也没有一个人能ensure以后又会是怎样。
2. The creation of new types of food不仅对人有害,而且还会破坏生态平衡,杀害野生动物。

In my opinion, the creation of new types of food can benefit us a lot.
1 .First and foremost, it can solve the crisis of food shortage which is one of the currently biggest problem in the world.
2. 由于它的产量很大,它可占用更少的地方,节省更多的空间。
3. 也由于它使用了新科技,它可保护环境,减少对土壤的破坏,对水资源的污染和所消耗。

To sum up, I believe the advantages of the creation of new types of food and vegetable outweigh (好像当时写多了个t) the disadvantages. 因此我们要大力支持对developments of creation of new types of food.,这样才会促进更多的科技的发展,世界会变得更美好。

自我分析
对于题目
1.我当时不知怎么的,好像没看见“such as factory farming”,全篇文章没提到过一次,只大量的写scientific creations of new types of fruits and vegetables,不知是否跑题,请大家告诉我一下。

对于内容
2.开头好像很牵强,意思、语句好像不知所谓、不通顺。(好像是从那本雅思8分万能作文中copy过来的。)是否有点模板的模式呢?但我觉得这样好像比较少人用,有点新意吧。但可能也在这里扣分。请大家分析一下。

3. 第二句是否又跑题了?说成是政府是否应资助农业的话题???(我一贯的开头,都不会照着题目的意思去想,会自己想一个切入点来写。不知这样好吗?请多多指教啊!)