有些人认为犯罪是人的天性，而有些人认为我们可以在小孩小的时候停止他们的这种倾向，你有什么看法?

　　Crimes undermine human society. Reasons for committing a crime are varied and complex, so we could not say that violation of law is just human nature and that people’s tendency to break the law could be stopped when they are young.

　　We are still not sure what causes people to commit a crime. The reason seems to be clear in cases in which a thief steals money to make a living or buy things normally unaffordable. Many thieves, when caught and interviewed, reveal that they come from poor families and have very little education. Therefore we could establish a relation between less privileged family background and low level of education. Many people used to believe that parents could teach their children the harms of wrongdoing by showing them the consequences of such action and the obligation of complying with social norms. Such method works for most children who are aware of what they are doing and what would happen from their action. But we also learn from news or other sources that many high-level officials take bribes or abuse power for their own benefit. Such people with high income and good education clearly know what they are doing and the possible consequences. Such crimes would not have happened if tendency to commit crimes could be stopped when people were young.

　Moreover, we know that people tend to act for their own benefit, but we do not know if this is due to human nature or other causes such as ideas learned later in life. If it is human nature, people live in faraway places without much education would commit crimes at a higher rate than people with schooling in cities. By contrast, people in remote places are more honest and kind, and the crime rate is significantly lower than that in city. From such evidence, we could not conclude that the above assertion is true.

　　While we continue to explore what causes crime and how to prevent it, we need to bear in mind that it is far more complex than we normally think. Accordingly, measures for crime prevention should also be multidimensional.

　　To sum up, the conclusion that it is human nature to commit crime and that people’s tendency to break the law could be stopped when they are young is not well supported. People become criminals for many reasons and we should adopt more effective methods for crime prevention.

MODEL (2)

　　Some people believe that①. Other people take the view that②. While both methods may have their advantages and disadvantages, they can be applied under different circumstances. Afterwards, I will explain my opinion about it.

　　For A, ③

　　But this also demonstrates that④

　　Moreover, ⑤

　　B, on the other hand, ⑥. For example, ⑦.

　　In my opinion, the advantages of B are more than those of A because B fits me better in two ways; First⑧. Second, ⑨.

　　①人们的第一种观点

　　②人们的第二种观点

　　③A的一个优势

　　④A所隐含的劣势

　　⑤A的一个大缺点

　　⑥B的一个明显优势

　　⑦举例说明B的优势

　　⑧对我来讲，B的第一个优势

　　⑨对我来讲，B的第二个优势